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Kel Heinen | @Aightball
J.P. says: I was initially drawn to your story cause of the medevac rescue angle. I'm an RN in my day job. But it was well paced with a good balance of dialogue and exposition that kept my attention. Very well written, you painted a clear word picture.
Silver James | @SilverJames_
J.P. says: Very nice balance between dialogue and exposition. The you crank up the stakes from being just stranded to have bad guys shooting at them adds to the tension. I can already feel the romantic tension between these two
Louisa Bacio | @Louisabacio
J.P. says: I'm normally not drawn to the angsty emotional ride it seems this story is setting up to be. Yet for some reason I'm drawn to this snippet. Good solid writing craft and you gave me a protagonist I can root for. Your set up here leaves me with so many questions to keep me reading.
A creak in the hallway drew her attention. Her son Maddox stood there, eyes wide and face blotchy from crying.
“But what about my toys? I have to leave all my stuff?”
“Only what’s important. Take Buddy your bear, some cars. We have to move fast.” As she talked, she packed, moving into the bathroom to grab a brush and makeup. Time was running out. He’d be home soon.
“But I don’t wanna go.”
“Think of it as an adventure.” She rubbed his soft hair, and kissed his forehead before nudging him to his room. “Five minutes.”
In the kitchen, she filled a grocery bag with goodies, a few snacks to hold them over. She glanced at the clock and then the front door. Any time now, he could come home, and then she’d be too late.
They’d be too late.
In her purse were their birth certificates, social security cards and her passport. The “find” feature on the iPad had to be disabled, or he’d be able to use it to track them. It was one thing to get out, and another to get out safe.
Maddox shuffled into the room, dragging his bags and his blanket. Only the essentials. They were getting out. Now.
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